Published September 9, 2007
Finally it is night,
And he is turning me off.
My battery is very low.
He's pushed my buttons all day long.
He inserts the charger: in, out, in, out.
It feels very good after such a long day.
I am rejuvenated and ready to work: again.
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I really liked this. This metaphor you've chosen was really a great one. It makes perfect sense, and it doesn't get confusing. Short and to the point, my kind of poem. I was happy with this poem, and I also suggest moving it to dramatic poetry. Anyway, well done!
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[Caitlin]
I was expecting something great from this. Nice job, you delivered.
Classic. This is a good poem. I suggest dramatic poetry for it.
Not sure if I'd use the colon inbetween "work," and "again," though. I'd just take it out. Although it does add emphasis, so it's up to you.
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