MissGangamash

OOooooooooh even more intriguing. Nitpicks first to get them out of the way: 'A single candle flame, flickering alone against a sea of darkness. A single pillar of hope against ...

Hello! The title drew me in and I love angel stories. However, I'm not very good at reviewing poetry because I don't really write it and know about rules and ...

Hello! Happy Review Day! As I've not read the previous chapters I can't say anything about the overall story so I'll just comment on this chapter itself. So... there are ...

Hello! Here to review! First off, I did click on this because the title are lyrics from a Mcfly song XD Anyhooo, I'm not really sure what to make of ...

Hello! Here to review! So, this is pretty confusing. It wasn't until the end when I realised the two paragraphs are two different people. I'm guessing the first is Tracy ...

Hello! Here to review! At first I thought this poem was about a break up. Maybe the 'hero' thought they were doing the right thing for you by leaving and ...

What a curious first chapter. Your descriptions are good, I could picture everything well in my head. Your sentences seem to run-on sometimes though. Perhaps cut out a few commas. ...

I didn't expect the story to take this turn. I do like the 'powers' element but I think its happened too fast. We don't really know your character yet and ...

Hello! Here to review. First of all, Night is an unusual name. Is it a nickname of his? If so, it has intrigued me as to where it came from. ...

I like this! I'm not great at reviewing poetry so bare with me. First, capitalise your 'I's'... unless they are lower case for a particular reason..? I think the last ...

I find NaNoWriMo very unrealistic for me. I think it's a good way to just jot a load of random ideas down and create a very messy draft with what ...

Happy review day! A few nit-picks : '...of her lemonade, She clicked her beige nails...' - 'She' shouldn't be capitalised. 'His let his mouth come a bit unhinged' - He ...

Happy Review Day! This is a very sad story and I you managed to portray a lot of emotion in such a short piece. This does need looking over though, ...

Happy Review Day! I'm not a great poet so I'm not very good at analysing poetry but I'll just let you know what I think! It reminds me of a ...

Okay... So... I'm confused. Who is Miss Auburn? She has been sent to this school to discuss changes yet she is only 18, the same age as the students. So... ...