MissGangamash

'The sun was getting low and the shadows settled upon the grey cement top of the skyscrapers. A boy stood on the edge of a building looking down as the ...

Happy Review Day! I'll write as I'm reading... 'my wallet's leather have worn' = 'my wallet's leather has worn' 'shortcut to the city was heavily crowed' = 'was heavily crowded(?)' ...

Happy Review Day! I haven't read any other chapters so this is from fresh eyes. I'll point things out as I read- 'Ever since he'd that dream, with the deer' ...

Hey! I’m here for a review. I’m going to review as I read and then do an overall thing at the end- ‘Contestants, if you would please put your helmets ...

Hello! Here for a review! I've just seen your comment saying that you can't get the piece to centre. It shouldn't be centred anyway, that's not how you format prose. ...

I saw your piece in the 'pieces from new writers' section so I thought I'd take a look. This is a really interesting piece. You rationalise an 'irrational' fear really ...

Hey! I saw you've uploaded another chapter so I thought I'd go back to the beginning. The first chapter is a bit jarring. She says she's running and she's fearful ...

Hi! I saw chapter 4 in the Green Room but I don't like reading chapters when I don't have context, so here I am at the beginning! Firstly, as a ...

Saw this in the green room so I thought I'd give it a read and give you your first review. Is there a reason you're not using quotation marks for ...

Hey! Congrats on uploading your first chapter! I'm going to pick things out as I read and then do an overall review. Firstly, I'm not a fan of starting a ...

I like this but it confuses me haha. I kinda like the ambiguity of it. So is his brother and his parents dead? If his parents were in the car ...

Hello! I'll point out a few things first and then get to my thoughts... 'At age seven, I was a year younger than him' - this doesn't sound right. The ...

Wow, this is a wonderful piece! You do a great job at saying things without saying things. For example, the fact that her second love is the narrator and not ...

I love when things just suddenly give you inspiration to write a piece. I think this is an interesting story but because its foundation is the relationships within this family, ...

Hey! Here to review! I love a weird story so I was drawn to your piece haha. I think the structuring of the piece needs to be altered a little. ...