Miraculor77

Thanks for the review! It really means a lot to me. As paraphrased from Google, "faze" means 'to disturb or disconcert,' and "phase" means 'an event in a sequential order,' ...

Thanks for the review! I put the commas in those places to emphasize certain parts or adjust the flow of reading, so I'll be keeping those. I fixed the typo, ...

@Everlight I saw some things in your review that I want to point out. I checked out erinr05's profile and it says that they are from the UK, which means ...

I know, right? It's not a slow start like I've seen some other writers do, and it never completely slows down. It gives us hints at the world and characters, ...

Sorry for the late reply. The 12th chapter is in the making, should I tag you when it comes out? This way, you'll get a notification when I release the ...

I switched the tenses on purpose, but it could be organized better. Thanks for the review!

Yes, it did help. That sentence (the nitpicky one) had been bothering me as well, but seeing someone else notice it means that I should probably fix it. Kyre stealing ...

I just wanted to say: This poem hit me hard. As someone who had to move from one corner of America to the other, I felt this poem resonate with ...

Thanks for the review! I went back and changed a few words here and there because I felt like I needed to. I've always hated it when characters in books ...

I took out the part where Kyre is angry at Ashe because it sounded too forced and replaced it with something else. I didn't include the rest of the transition ...

I know I'm getting back to this really late, but I figured I'd clear up another thing as well: The painting is a painting, and art doesn't always show the ...

@Liberty @mellifera I went back and edited the chapter and also added to the part where Kyre finds Ashe. It had been playing in my head when I first started ...

Hi. Sorry for the late reply. I tried to separate the last three lines from the rest, but it didn't work, and it seemed like too much to change it. ...

No, you did not come off as harsh. I just wrote what I felt when I felt it, so I wasn't really thinking about structure or originality. Thanks for the ...

Yes, I did mean "at" the table. I was writing this in a rush. :) I feel like I used too many scene transitions, and that some scenes could have ...