Miraculor77

Thanks for the review! :) Where did I switch tenses? I looked through it but couldn't find anything.

Thanks for the review! I'll go back and smooth it over later. I started at 13, by the way. I only turned 14 about a week ago. :)

Ah okay. I'll see what I can do. Thanks for your input!

Oh alright. If you don't mind me asking (again :)), should I combine the first two chapters of the book in draft two? The first chapter is Ashe freaking out ...

Oh, and thanks for the review! (:

If you've been keeping up with the previous chapters, you'll recognize the girl soon enough. :) Because you actually read the story, and probably have some thoughts about it, I ...

About your comment on the "Swift and silent" part: I changed the sentence a little so it has better grammar. Now it says: " Before she can look up, Kat ...

I think that @TheShauzer meant that "the day's bites" are all the things that hurt us during the day, everything from harsh remarks to actual bug bites, and that love ...

I have a feeling that you only wrote this to share it and that you probably don't want reviews. Being diagnosed and having to just live with it must be ...

Thanks for the review! (: I went back and smoothed parts of it out, it should read a little better now.

I didn't mean to make it sound like that. I do care about what you think about my writing. And while this chapter is pretty good, some of my earlier ...

I gave Kyre a hug for you. He was really confused. XD I fixed the typo. I wonder why I didn't catch it when I was reading through the chapter. ...

I fixed the sentence you mentioned in your first nitpick; I replaced the comma with the word "and." What do you mean by "tense" in the second nitpick? It's all ...

Yes, I do know what you mean, and that was my intention. The memory came to Kyre in a jarring and extreme way, and I wanted the reader to feel ...

Well, I'm gonna try to answer it anyway. :) While it's not all the way correct, it's not completely incorrect either. A lot of writers bend grammar rules for their ...