MidnightVampire

gosh, ghost, this is sad. But good. Really good. *searches to find more of your poetry* Keep writing. ~MV

I thouhgt this was funny, something that you wouldn't see normally. As in a good thing, very creative. I dont know what else to say.

Um... shouldn't this be in the poetry section. You said it was a poem, after all. Just wonderin' ~MV

yay.. continue on! I really can't critique anything (probably because the weather outside is makeing me feel off) right now, but do continue.

Shanan-cat - At least your honest. I'll try and fix (and maybe rewrite) this in ELT today. Thanx.

This is good. It might help if you have some punctuation (Mrs. S would like that), I like the ending also. Maybe make the WAS into italicized? I don't know.

Um... I haven't been able to critique this. It might help if you format it a little bit differently. Sorry.

I liked it. It's a good continuation thing off of the Valentine's day sucks (toby's part). It's nice to know a little more about Ethan. I'm sorry that really wasn't ...

sorry I haven't been able to reply often (I only have 5 minutes so I have to make it quick). I don't think this chapter is too choppy. I actually ...

I liked it... That was absoulutley no... but o well. I like the descriptive begining. PM me if you continue it.

well, actually, this was for my elt class (I get to write!).... and she collects our writing and grades them. The sad part is..... I don't have mine back yet. ...

wow. and since this is so great... I'm going to say it again. Wow. You got the message acrossed, i now feel sad, but that's good. Its a really good ...

Thanks! I know this really sucks at the time. (I first wrote it very quickly), so any critisism helps.

Loved it! Happy happy, I was waiting for this. Interesting thing with the tiffany thing. I've got no complaints, couldn't have any. -MV

Wow. At first I was like 'what's so bad about her mom?'. Then the end part about the whip, I begin to see. Creepy, but I like it. PM me ...