MidnightVampire

I liked this, I didn't get it until Leja said that it was cool from the mothers perspective. Then I reread it, and I got it! *happy* I think its ...

Spelling would be nice, first of all. that's really good, left me speachless, staring at the screen and wondering when I'll faint. The poem is very simple, but I do ...

Ok, not the best at crits.(as you have probably noticed.) The change to me is a little odd, i don't know where it's really going. I do, however, think that ...

Ok, there was only one things that bothered me. It is exciting when you have him being shot off the cliff. There is a problem with it though: It's impossible. ...

I actually really liked this (yay self esteem booster!) It is dramatic, very dramatic, which is something I like. It also has some emotion (which most of my poems seem ...

Ok, things seem to happen quickly. He meets Beckah, and falls in love with her in a couple of hours. This kinda bugs me, because things don't happen in real ...

Ok, I finally have time to reply. 1. I did think that this speach went a little bit long, but it helped show how she was raised and what she ...

First of all.. Welcome to YWS! This stanza seems off (and since I still can't get the quote to work, it's handwritten): to let my mind fast-forward so i click ...

I liked it. Something I actually got, makes me proud. This is a very interesting subject (I call them Psi- vampires like order.) Ok, and (this is something to clarify ...

*Dies of laughing, just like my sister said I would* So now I'm a ghost, trying to critique you between laughing and my fingers floating through the keyboard. That was ...

I loved this. The first sentence just threw me into the writing, couldn't leave. Why were you worried about putting this up on yws? It's great! Reida critiqued most of ...

I liked it. I'm sorry I'm not much of a critic (sorry extraterestrial for using your words) I like the twist where the mother says "Would you kill your own ...

I liked it. In a way it reminds me of a story that my mom told me. About how she had a friend who's life was completely controlled by her ...

Oh, gosh. I loved this. Its one of those sweet stories that arn't super dramatic or something like that. At first I thought that there were no more stars visible ...

ok, i read the second on for the contest, and I decided that I liked it so much that I'd read the first part! Ok, I really really liked this. ...