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Hey there! This paragraph bothered me a bit, as it's missing some questions marks. As I lay there, swathed in the warm evening air, I wondered how these humans could ...

Heya! So, I feel as though part two is a bit (like tiny, tiny bit) flatter than the first one. I think (and this is just personal opinion here) that ...

Hi, So, I've noticed that there's minimal emotion in this piece, with this poem, I think that putting emotion in it would definitely help us sympathise with the narrator more. ...

Hi there. So, I noticed a few things when reading this through. I am alone Safe and consistent I don't quite understand why you've put consistent there. I don't think ...

Heya! I have to agree with RachelElg here about slowing it down a bit. Show us that people like Alicia more. Show us how her popularity increased. At the moment ...

Hello! First off, I have to agree with liveinthelight about this sentence: He then- wait, maybe I should first explain how this all began. It's really, really abrupt and kind ...

Hello! Firstly, I have to say that I think the chapter is a tad too short. Now, there's nothing wrong about short chapters, short chapters are brilliant. But, with your ...

Hi there! As I was reading, I noticed there was a few grammatical errors, but the main one, I saw was that some lines starts with a capital while others ...

I'll have to repeat what you have said yourself here: challenged, and fit me, When I first read it through, I didn't think it the way you intended it. I ...

I'm not too sure I like the repetition of 'I am here' and 'Never fear'. It came across a little repetitive to me. I can also see the reassuring side ...

Hello shiney1! I can see that you've thought about this, you've thought about which words to use so that it fits in with the across-stick and doesn't sound forced. I ...

You have a very flowing sort of writing style here, the words were smooth and you gave plenty of descriptions. I also think that you've captured the characer's emotions beautifully.The ...

I liked how you turned something so simple, your wardrobe, into something so dramatic, war. Very clever. The rhyming here and there was also very good. I also liked the ...

Hello Djinn! To start off, I'd like to say that I loved how you built the story up to the climax and the revealed the missing information at the end. ...

Hello KCunder! First of all, may I suggest that you run your story through a spell check first? I saw a few typos and spelling mistakes. With the story: I ...