MiRaCLeS

First sentence in and I see something wrong. Being the daughter of the queen is not undemanding and pleasant at all. You see the double negative there? Not un demanding. ...

I noticed several things while reading through this: 1. Your capitalisation of the word "Mage" is a bit incosistent. In the first paragraph, the word 'mage' wasn't capitalised. Yet in ...

O.o Now I want to read more. Good job on the hooking me in. However, some corrections: Pain seared across Alec’s palm, a brilliant light filled his vision. “Alec, we ...

Hello, Your poem flowed brilliantly, you used the right words: powerful, not weak. You also have a really cool metaphor. However, I'm not sure I would know what this 'torturous ...

Hi snowberry23, Alright to start off with, the poem seemed a little confusing you seem to alternate between wanting 'you' and 'him'. It did start to get clearer towards the ...

Actually the wording isn't that awkward. Except for the first stanza, the wording it a tiny bit awkward it kind of corrupts the flow. Also you used the word pain ...

Beautiful poem. Short, simple and sweet. Although I do think that the second part of the poem about God seems a little bit jolting. One moment it's about 'you' who ...

Hi greg925, I found your structuring a tad strange here: Is this the consequence of a second rate friendship? By some happy coincidence, we were linked together. I don't understand ...

Nice poem, short and sweet. Love the title as well. Although, may I suggest breaking it into stanzas? Like this: My hand reflects my work Callused fingertips Ink-stains rampant. My ...

Hi, Okay, you have a nice poem there, breaking through the ordinary, boring walls of describing the ocean (blue, calming, etc.) with jumping adjectives and similes. However, I spotted a ...

Very nice, very unique. I'll admit, I'll never have thought of doing a poem from an emotion's point of view before. Brilliant. Although, I will admit it seemed a tiny ...

Hi sarahjane97, The poem you have is very sombre, you potrayed that brilliantly. You have very nice imagery. Especially here: from a tight line of war to an open crescent. ...

Alright, since the others have mentioned the lack of structuring, I won't go into it too much. It does look a bit full and hard to read though. The poem ...

Hi cupcake. You have a (literally and metaphorically) sweet poem. It's like a rainbow, with all the flavours you threw out there. Your poem flowed naturally. Your structuring and grammatically ...

Hello Shyblueishflower, Like the previous reviews have mentioned. Breaking it up into stanzas would be great: it makes it easier to read. Now that's out of the way, I can ...