Published May 2, 2011
You were there,
When we were happy;
While laughing and giggling,
You were with me.
We were together,
Through everything;
Then why aren’t you here,
When I need you?
I need you the most now,
And you’re gone.
I am here. Don’t you remember your life verse? “For the Lord your God is with you WHERE EVER you go.”
Joshua 1:9. Yes God, thank you for reminding me.
Of course child, I wouldn’t leave you, when you I love you so much.
I love you, too, God. Thanks for being with me, always.
Always...
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Very well done I truly enjoyed this. I hope to read more of your work soon. I could not find anything wrong with this by grammar or spelling means so yay! Haha. Well I love it and can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work and Buenas Suerte. Hope you get many helpful reviews and Sayonara.
Best of wishes,
Soulkana<3
I love this poem!!! Good job, I am so liking!!!!!
Oh wow. I love this!!!! What Wondrous Love is This....(reminds me of that song.) You pretty much explained my quote from C.S. Lewis...on my signature below.
Jesus shouts to us in our pains!
Beautiful poem. Short, simple and sweet.
Although I do think that the second part of the poem about God seems a little bit jolting. One moment it's about 'you' who is a lover, I''m guessing? abandoning you, then it moves into God. I got a bit left behind there. Maybe you could add another stanza gradually going into more religious things?
Other than that, beautiful poem.
Hi, Jane! Beautiful poem. Yes, God never leaves us.
I love it, thanks for reminding me! xD
I think I spotted a typo though.
I think you meant "through".
That's all! Good job!
~Solvy <3
Beautiful! Well done!
Keep it up,
~FW~
That was gorgeous and beautiful. Amazing job. <3 I love that Bible verse. Awesome job.