Megrim

Hey there, here for the Big Review yet again! Since you said you didn't think you'd revisit the other novel, I thought I'd try a short story. I was scrolling ...

Hey there, Megrim here for the Big Review! I picked this one since there are a lot of subs for this novel, so I can come back and read more ...

Hey there, here to review as requested. This is a fun start, full of action and dramatic imagery. It also has a solid arc with a beginning, middle, and end, ...

Hello Megrim here as requested! Since this is the one you linked I'm just going to jump right in and have at it. I'm going to talk about technique things ...

Hi there, Megrim here for the Big Review! I had a hard time finding something recent-ish and not deleted :P But here I am. I read this and enjoyed this, ...

Megrim here for The Big Review! So many things to choose from... but I picked fantasy because that's up my alley! Since this is a competition and all I figured ...

Hi there! I saw the mention of a black hole and couldn't turn away. It's an intruiging opening--looks like we're headed for some time travel. I thought it was interesting ...

Hi, Megrim here for The Big Review! I haven't reviewed a poem before, so unlucky you get to be my guinea pig. I don't write or even read much poetry ...

Hi back for ch4 finally! I like the spider as something to focus on. It not only provides a visual, I guess you could call it setting, but it gives ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I loved the atmosphere of this. A foggy forest is lovely, eerie, beautiful imagery. Especially with a ghostly white figure... it all fits together so ...

It's only been two minutes since she teleported outside?! Wasn't it 10:35?? So that whole chase and conversation and sky thing only took 2 minutes? Or am I totally confused? ...

Hi again! I like the POV switch. I love multiple POVs. I love the sky darkening stuff--very neat imagery. I also like the new information that Ronnie's been spying on ...

Hello again! This is a much better opening for the novel! This took more time to give us some setting and atmosphere, which helped a lot, and the character shone ...

Ack, paragraphs. This is really hard to read. Try to keep paragraphs to only a few lines at a time, or they start to look like a big wall of ...

Ah guess I'm too slow, already out of the green room! Oh well! The semicolon in the first sentence shouldn't be there. A semicolon is generally used to tie together ...