Megrim

I know you asked for ch4, but I figured I'd start at the beginning and work through them all. You writing is great, so I might go a little more ...

I'm not sure what this is meant to be, exactly, but it's beautiful. It resonates with me, as an avid tea-drinker and illness-sufferer. Even though it's only four paragraphs, they ...

This was hilarious. I don't know if I can really review this per se, but I totally loved it. I feel the same way about Divergent. Hearing those feelings expressed ...

Great, well-thought out comments on the subject. I really like how you're polite and positive in showing both your positive and negative thoughts. I'm not good at being so positive ...

Hi there! Fun introduction to the story, and it raises a lot of questions about how the two parts of the story will come together. I loved the first scene, ...

Hi there! Love the premise. My heart goes out to Chris, for his disability, being cast off by his family, left to be studied by an unsympathetic caretaker... Full of ...

Hi there! This is a fun premise and you open with an exciting, gripping action scene. The high tension really makes me want to know how things turn out. The ...

Hi there! I haven't read the previous chapters so this review won't have that context. I liked the set-up, especially the Up-Above vs down here, and I love the concept ...

Hello! I'm going to do a grammar and spelling review for you today, since I think that's the biggest thing you can work on right now. The biggest two things ...

Look, chapter 8! Figured I'd stop by :) A few thoughts popped into my head while reading. How does someone become an adventurer? Can anyone who aspires to be one ...

Okay, back to my normal commenting-at-the-end business. This chapter was short! I'm guessing there's a part 2 coming? The end isn't much of an end. I'm loving the worldbuilding, the ...

I liked my style last time, with jotting down my thoughts. Not sure if it worked well for you, but it was easier for me, so I'm going to do ...

Since I covered most of my major topics last time, I'm going to try typing down my thoughts as I read for this one. (It won't be as organized.) --- ...

Hello! I saw your latest chapter in the green room so thought I'd come back and start at the beginning, and I'm glad I did. I love it. The worldbuilding ...

At first I was like "how did I miss one!" But then I realized it was posted later. I think the plot so far sounds reasonable. I like Zander's plan ...