Megrim

Helloooo Megrim here to review as requested, and with pretty much no knowledge of poetry so take it all with a grain of salt! Formatting first. I think I do ...

Hello there! I read this for Lightsong's entry into the Critique Crucible, and while I was at it I noticed some things no one else mentioned yet. While I really ...

Fantastic revision! The characters are much more lovable and understandable this time around, and I think you really brought out the relationship between the Millie and Mr Adkins. I love ...

I looooove what you've done with this since last week. You've really smoothed it out and brought the characters much more alive. The opening makes Mia immediately sympathetic, as we ...

Hey there! So far this one is pretty unique with its subject so I'm loving that. The first scene is excellent. You do a great job of immediately establishing the ...

Hi! I'm excited to see a SF story in the mix. I like the MC, being a strong and capable woman, who stands up for herself in the end. It's ...

Hey there! Brave first submission of the contest. This is a cute story and fits nicely into its length. I particularly found Lisa charming (especially lines like Maybe I’ll reincarnate ...

I there! I got here a rather roundabout way. I saw the first chapter in the green room and thought I should do this one first. Then it disappeared before ...

Hi there! I spotted this in the green room and thought I'd come to investigate. This actually has quite a similar feel to my friend's book, which is also a ...

Hi there, and welcome to YWS! I'm Megrim, one of the mods from the Resources forums (good place to ask questions and join in discussions and brainstorming!) First of all, ...

Hey there! I'm not sure if I have much to say in the way of criticism, because this was really fantastic. At first, I was thinking I might comment on ...

I love this prologue! It's beautiful, especially the imagery at the beginning, and the characters are fascinating and enigmatic. I love the descriptions, and the character's reflecting on the ages ...

Hi Feltrix, and welcome to YWS! This is a very fun world & story you've got her, and likable characters. I peeked at your wall and must confess I'm dying ...

Hi! Excited to read this! I'm like SUPER worried about Isaiah because I don't really recall seeing mention of him on your character list / LMS notes in general :( ...

Oooh the first chapter is up, yay! I love psych ward/hospital settings. I also am really intrigued by the MC--you have some strong characterization going on with the repetition of ...