Meddle

Opening Good opening. Let the first line stand on it's own. The opening is like an appetizer. Let it stand on it's own and don't put it too close or ...

DoubleOJell0 I apologize in advance for the harness of this is review. You should lose first sentence or make it matter. A good short story starts with something that catches ...

Hey Emily, Welcome to the Young Writers Society. You're technical writing (punctuation and formatting) all looks really good. So I wanna just jump right into the story line. The starting ...

Hey Cheetah, First off excellent work with pacing. The way you mete out details is driving, I literally could read fast enough and execution was flawless so I was to ...

Hey Bugslake, I really liked this work, but I felt like it could been taken up a notch with some context. Time period would especially help us to know the ...

Hey shinethroughthedark, You have a really beautiful reflective piece here and the diction means that anybody can approach it. Grammar wise i don't see anything, so let's get down to ...

So this one is definitely is my favorite so far. It had me fidgeting in my seat from the start. The character development you began in the previous story continues ...

So this actually reminds of an episode from Supernatural which is very similar in style, which is high praise coming me.The use of camera as fourth point of view could ...

As a person who's lived by the sea my whole life I absolutely love the imagery in this work. However, I think you could have so much detail. The shore ...

Hey SecreteJournalist, Short, simple and sweet is the name of the game with this poem. There's nothing really to critique with what you've got here. However, I think you have ...

Well I you did say it was conclusive, but I didn't know you would mean like this. The story is great overall, I can't really comment on it's accuracy to ...

Hey Lucrezia, I really appreciate the descriptive nature of your story. Taking the time help the reader know what the environment looks like and especially the central character was pivotal ...

Hey Lucrezia, I wanted to return the favor by reviewing one of your works. First off let me say this is definitely a page scroller. Very driving narrative, I really ...