Master_Yoda

Yo Dudette, It's me reporting in for duty. I liked the second part of this chapter, but I disliked the first. I'm finding myself having a difficult time putting logic ...

Hello Silverclaw You have great potential, but you lack the structure needed to write a true masterpiece. Your English is decent, and your idea is also fair, but a large ...

Hey Ginger, You enjoy cows, but you have an allergy to leather? You poor thing. You write a fairly strong prose, but you don't really show it to us properly. ...

Yo Dudette, After reading the first chapter, here are my thoughts: - You have established conflict between mother and daughter. Good job there. - You have very clearly defined MC's ...

Hi there, Welcome to YWS. Let's see what help I can offer here. I can see that your grammar is fair, and you have some English skills. That's a good ...

Okay, this is disturbing for a number of reasons. The only reason I read through it was because it was immediately apparent that it was in dire need of review, ...

Okay, so I actually don't have time to review this now as I'm swamped with calculus work, but screw calculus. I want to review. Your story is very interestingly structured. ...

Hey Priceless, A while ago you requested a review for this piece on my WRFF thread and because I got caught up in a swarm of pressures I have been ...

Hi Joshua, I know it's been a real long time since I said I'd review this for you, but between the start of school and now, I have had a ...

Hi Dreamworx, I hadn't read your writing in ages before this. You still write a fluid prose, focus strongly on character conflict, have a bunch of interesting imagery and metaphors ...

Epilogue: After a while of hanging out with their girlfriends, Fluffy-bunny worked out that many of them were in fact either homosexual or female. What resulted, was an understanding that ...

Wow, you're actually a really good writer. Not too often you see stuff as nicely spun together as this. That said, this is a cliched, overdone to the point of ...

So, after you did such a long and thorough review and I saw this piece which looks new enough for review I thought I'd try return a part of the ...

Hey Octavian! Let us discuss your pieces of writing. I'll start with the first. You had a brilliant idea here and you capitalized on it. Both literally and metaphorically this ...

Here's your requested review: You remind me very much of myself a while back, Jasmine. I wrote a piece entitled Abuse that I still have somewhere on this website. *goes ...