Masquerade

Hello. I am Masque and I shall be reviewing your story today. Green = My comments Red = Edits Purple = This sounds awkward. King Iroham sits upon his throne, ...

Hello. I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your work today. Alright. The first thing I noticed about this is that it's not exactly a poem, but I find it ...

Wow, what an interesting poem. I'm not quite sure what to say about this, but I liked it! It sounded almost like a prose piece but broken up into lines ...

Hello there, I'm Masque, and I shall be reviewing your work today. -ehem- The plot itself of this story seems like it could be really interesting, but it needs to ...

Hello Sakuragirl1, I'm Masque, and I shall be reviewing your work today. -puts on intelligent looking glasses- Key: Blue = Really like this Purple = This sounds awkward Red = ...

Hello there, I'm Masque, and I shall be reviewing your poem today. -ehem- I really enjoyed this poem. I feel like it put the idea of war into words very ...

Hello. I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your poem today. Firstly, as others have said, I liked the subject matter, because it isn't a way overused topic like ...

Hello Morte, I'm Masque and I shall be reviewing your novel today. You’re lucky (or maybe not) and I’m in a mood to do a lot of reviewing, and thus ...

Hello, I am Masque, and I shall be reviewing your poem today! When you're here, there is also much pain Like the emptiness that comes with rain I really like ...

Alright, I see that grammar has pretty much been covered, however, I do think you need some puncuation at the end of lines. It tells the reader when they should ...

I really liked this poem. It was short yet sweet. It is often more difficult to convey a story and emotion in such a short poem, but you pulled it ...

I thought this was a pretty good poem. When I started reading it, I thought it was going to be another one of those poems that blames everyone else. It ...

I thought this was quite good. There's just a few things that need to be pointed out. You switched tenses a few times. "she rubbed her temples a useless attempt ...

I thought this poem was quite interesting, and I must admit I was thinking of that song in Pocahontas. Maha. Anyways, I think the poem would be neater and easier ...

I enjoyed this poem. It sucked me right in, which is not something that happens terribly frequently, so kudos for that. I walk among the living, but I know I ...