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Hi! First of all, a mighty Thank You is in order for providing me with an excuse to not do my physics homework. 8) Score! Oh and also, I'll probably ...

[comes back to life to offer suggestion] Oh oh oh! When Bella is covered in blood and Edward must kiss her, he should be in agony about "the sweet, intoxicating ...

RAWR. It's story-ripping time. Grammar and Wording. First of all, there were a few little mistakes that could easily be fixed if you read this over again. I'm not going ...

In return for this critique, I want the blood of your first-born son. Haha, no, don't give me anything but a good read.:) So, let's jump right into the critiquing, ...

Let's jump right into the review, shall we? And forgive me if I'm a little harsh-it's only because rewriting is a friend of mine. =] So, first, since you mentioned ...

Hi deathkougra. As Scarecrow said, one of the rules is to do two critiques for every piece of work you have posted. You can check out all the rules here. ...

Hey nutmegan, welcome to the site! There's actually a forum for lyrics down below. :) One of our lovely moderators will move it there soon, no doubt. Also, the first ...

Oh goodness! I love this. (And I think it's fine here.) Really, your idea and your words and everything are great! It's awesome. So I'm sorry, but I only have ...

Hey Loozle! This is poem is interesting, a take on being "invisible," correct? I could be completely wrong here but I get the impression that you wrote this from the ...

Hello Raider and welcome to the site. I agree with Princess' critique, so I'll try not to repeat anything she said! Except about the 2:1 rule. Gotta spread the love, ...

I was going to start this critique off with, "Sorry, the only things I know about Henry VIII are from The Other Boleyn Girl!" But then I finished your story, ...

Hey BobcatPoet, welcome to YWS. You've probably heard this already, but the first rule here is to have two reviews done before posting your own work, and to keep up ...

Hello Maki! Sorry, it took awhile for me to get to this. Anyway, I don't have any gripes overall: your plot is going, your characters are good. So I'll just ...

Hi fragile_heart(!). I have to admit, I'm not wild about Twilight or Twilight fanfics, but I think this one was pretty good. There were a couple of technical things I ...

Let me be very, very clear: THIS DOESN'T SUCK. This doesn't even resemble sucking. Remember that. I agree, it is a bit cliche. That can be a horrible, terrible, story-killing ...