MamaLama95

This was my favourite line; my fantasy all lined with gold now fogged with black It was a good piece of work - use punctuation though, otherwise it can be ...

Very touching, bittersweet - I quite liked this, except in the first ten liens or so, the fact that you use full stops after every line made it too stop-and-starty, ...

There was an over-repetition of 'terrible eyes'. I can understand using it a couple of times, but you overdid it a little. Aside from that, good, dark, mystical, and very ...

I don't really have much to pick up on here - Ignis' review was hella detailed. The one thing I would make a point of noting is the way your ...

See, this wasn't a bad poem because there was some emotion behind it - the thing is that I think you used two things you shouldn't have done together. You ...

Nice poem, easy to relate to, good use of punctuation, grammar, all that stuff - the only thing that bugged me was there was no image. I don't necessarily mean ...

First things first - you cannot use capitalization and have good grammar without punctuation. I know I do this a lot as well, and I apologize for being hypocritical, but ...

Personally I think I just have a weakness for your poems, but I thought this was quite brilliant. No little nitpicks that are worth pointing out to you, and even ...

I honestly don't understand why people think that not using capital letters is going to make their poem more personal, or emotional - this was good and sent across a ...

This poem feels a little misguided to me - you don't have a clear sense of who it is you're aiming at, or who you're talking to. And if you ...

I agree with Veritas, it feels underdeveloped - perhaps not like a naked cupcake because God knows those are still RAVISHING, but I still think you could do with a ...

First of all, brilliant. Absolutely brilliant, this is my favourite poem today so far, and I've read about ten, so really well done. Your work was powerful, emotional, refreshing, and ...

This made me laugh so much - not because it's idiotic or laughable, don't worry - because I felt so much in common with this poem. Except with me it's ...

You know, even though your meter was a bit off and the rhyming felt forced at times, I really enjoyed this. You took on a completely different style and you ...

Yeah all of it was great, but we drove each other wild. We didn't see eye to eye, all our complaints were filed. I didn't like this stanza - it ...