Maki-Chan

not bad for a prologue. You should search Google for forien names and thier meanings. Here's an exsample- HAimon= bloody (Greek)

space out please, and if it is really- really long then put it into parts. Helps readers not be so scared. ^_^

what is up with I’m and such?

I'm glad you liked it, and of course I'll PM you when I finish Chapter 2 ^_^

thanks Timea. I always try to improve my word choice and detail. I'm glad that you've noticed it ^_^. I'll Pm you when I finish chapter 2. I hope you ...

I agree with VG, other than that nice job ^_^

its a sad peom. I am sorry this happened to you. But its a lovely poem. ^_^

well this is a wierd peom. But just because it is wierd doesn't mean it it bad. I really liked this. This is the reason why I sleep with my ...

in his 1996 Lincoln Continental. CApatilize the I. Not too bad. WHen you post more tell me. ^_^

SR perhaps you should write a prologue. It helps draw readers in better. ^_^

thanks for checking this out. I'm glad you liked it Timea. ^_^

cool. I think this is pretty kick ass. ^_^ 9/10

thanks Timea, sorry there were so many mistakes- but my microsoft word got deleted so I have to use note pad. Which has no grammar or spelling check. I'm glad ...

hurray! one fan. oh well I agree with Talking_Pinata. Please stay away.

LOL ^_^ I really love this chapter. I feel connected to her. Her negativity and angry thougts- makes her more human. I love, love, love this!! but perhaps you could ...