Maisie

Thank you! I knew there were a few mistakes but I just wanted a couple of opinions on it to see what the technicalities were.

Thank you so much! :) Really appreciate the constructive criticism!

Thank you for your constructive criticism!

Thank you once again for all your constructive criticism! :)

To PreacherGirl18, I will be adding the third chapter today and keep going with the rest of the chapters for the forseeable future. Don't worry, there are like 28 chapters ...

Thank you for all your constructive criticism, I shall be working through my second chapter soon, and then go back and edit the chapters.

Thanks very much for the feedback! :D

I spaced it out as much as I thought was needed. I am going to write the second chapter tomorrow.

^Thank you so much! And sure, I'd be delighted to critique your story.

Thank you!

^ Thank you for the constructive crit. :mrgreen: I shall re-write this eventually. Then, I shall repost it.