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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Fires Of My Fury

    Considering that you are attempting to write upon a very written topic you really need to spend a greater amount of time considering the various pitfalls associated with those topics, ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Anthem Of The Broken Youth

    Title influenced by Wilfred Owen's Anthem for Doomed Youth? I agree with TimJim77, the capitals are annoying. First off I find the repetition of the same ending ("ight", "art" and ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: "Holding on"

    I understand you may feel this way but as a poem this wasn't very original at all. The imagery was weak - the strongest description probably was "crumbling down" or ...

    May 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: When Last I Saw the Fisher

    I quite liked it. The narrative moved forward rhythmically, everything was nicely phrased and had a good ring to it. The boatman, star and the voice are difficult to understand. ...

    May 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: They Come and They Go.

    I didn't like this too much. Your topic, love thats not meant to be, leaves a whole mass of potential descriptions or methods for presenting it but the descriptions in ...

    May 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Ms. Apt Diagnosis

    Let’s lie in fields of feline flowers 9 where the blades pierce and the whiskers tickle— 10 ........There, can you be free? 5 where the air is too black to ...

    May 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Steve the Goldfish

    The way that you have punctuated the piece is effective. Taking your first stanza: Praise fish tanks, giving a nice visual way of forgetting him, (also praised) dying in the ...

    May 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Dawn and Dusk

    I'm caught in two minds. The rhyme and rhythm are interesting and quite clever. In the first stanza: It glares into the corn ers , 7 thrusting their contents into ...

    May 10, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Sour

    his days are numbered in the crash-course direction tracked down and censored through the beaten screen he's found no solace in displays of affection his quality learnings are bound to ...

    May 8, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Untitled

    Simple yet with a hidden meaning. I can't really comment or make any criticisms it's too short to do that. All I can say is that it's very similar to ...

    Jun 4, 2007
  • Short Story » General, General Re: September the 6th, 2001

    Definitely was original and very easy to read - once I got into the main body of the story. Your beginning is overly descriptive and that really chokes up some ...

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: carbon mimeograph

    It's nicely written, it really does create a dark feeling and dark imagery. In the first stanza you have a really good rhythm - I'm not sure if it is ...

    Jun 2, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A Disused Shed in Co. Wexford

    Wow that is really good... But did you actually write it? Because I found the exact same poem by Derek Mahon, called the exact same thing, A disused Shed in ...

    Jun 1, 2007
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: [deleted]

    Hey Amelia, I like the concept and the well overall content of your poem but at times it doesn't quite sound like poetry, it's a bit simple. More recounting than ...

    Jun 1, 2007
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Villanelle: Passion

    I like the generally flow of the poem, I think that you've done well with the rhyme structure of the villanelle. The line "Oh Love, my Lord, be brave." doesn't ...

    May 30, 2007


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