Lucia

I really liked this!!! It was written in clear and concise sentences that explained your subject well! It really turned out to be food for thought. The comparison of a ...

This is kind of hard to describe. Maybe "cute" is the word I'm looking for. :) Okay, so, when they took Marshmallow to Mitch's place, I think that when it ...

I don't usually review poems, (reason being, I'm not too good at writing them. :) ) but I'll make an exception for this one. I thought that this was a ...

Nice work! Even if it is a rough draft, it's pretty nicely polished already. :) After reading the first one, I was wondering whether this story is supposed to be ...

I'm starting to really like where you are going with this. I noticed that this is the first time that Aurora really displays her magical powers. From the moment they ...

This was really good!!! It was written well, and the story line made sense. There were some very specific and active descriptions of people, and you portrayed emotions well. I ...

This seems to me to be an incredibly dark story. The beginning is slow, but explains a lot. The rest, well, the reader is just sitting there expecting and waiting ...

This is a pretty well written prologue. It leaves a good amount of suspense, as to make you want to read the book. The grammar is pretty good, just slight ...

This is great!! The tale is flowing along well, and it has a pretty good plot so far. I like that you switched the point of view in the beginning, ...

This is honestly one of the best views of a hospital that I have read. It displays a kind of discouraging aura that makes you want to shiver. There is ...

So far, I think that this book has a lot of potential. You use practically expert wording, and you describe her relationship with others very well. I love Aurora's rebellious ...

This was really good!!! The way you portrayed Peeta's emotions and the memories of the Games was brilliant! I think that this fanfic of The Hunger Games series has almost ...

You were very good at describing the scenery and the personality of Alexandria. I especially liked the storytelling. I think you did it very artfully. There were some things I ...

Overall, I enjoyed your story, and I think you had a good, deep plot, with a lot of messages in the background. The language you used made the story sound ...