LovelessSummer

Much better, Chocolate dear! It wasn’t something I planned to do ever. I had seen enough of it to last me a life time. This quote tells me that the ...

I will review this but I must go for now.

Okay! I'm here to review. Red= Corrections Purple= Suggestions/ Comments The unfriendly eyes of half the student body stared up at me from the aisle seats down below; I couldn't ...

Oh! They're called ellipses! Many thanks to you, Mizzle! He-he, I can be happy now!

Thank you all for your comments. Yes, of course there will be more. In the next section I'll try on improving the dialogue. You all have helped me a lot ...

Thank you all for you're comments. They were all very helpful.

Hahahahahahaha! Lena! Oh wow! You're so sick and wrong. You know I didn't mean it in that sense. So immature and perverted. Are you sure you're older than me? Anyway, ...

Woo, this is better! More developed, paced a bit more evenly, and your characters are profiled well. Though I had to take three breaks when reading this it was worth ...

Um, Whea. This isnt...a story. And it's old. It is just a bunch of emotions pushed together because-. Wheadee *sigh*. This was meant for the Non-Ficton thread and-. Wow. This ...

Ha, nevermind! They went home. Okay, so where did I leave off? Okay, so I finished reading this whole thing. I tried to read it all in one sitting-this was ...

More confusion and questions from yours truely! Wouldn't that make the bible a lie? If I recall correctly, the Bible stated that Adam and Eve were the first. Not the ...

*People surround(,) me cheering me on. (Start a new paragraph here and add a ")Sam! Samantha!(lose the exclamation point, add a comma and one of these --->") the mysterious person ...

A big super thank you hug to all who've posted. I have a problem, though. Should I continue from Marcie's POV? Or her daughters? Help? Big kiss, class dismissed! Muffins ...

I would request another, but seeing as though I'm already killed by squirrles I don't see how I can. Haha, keep writing my friend. I will, of course, be back ...

I want to star in one of your stories! The name is Summer -yes like the season-. I choose death by a rabid squirrel.