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Nice! Sounds like something Owl City could sing. Well done.

Really awesome! Very nice wording. *LIKED*

Hey hey! Very nice... Your poem was beautiful. A bit shaky in rythym sometimes but maybe you intended that. Welcome to YWS! *Liked* In Ink and Electronic Code, TheNewHero

But Percy's not the centre of this work. Does that exclude this from Fanfic?

This was really, really good. Beautiful and I wanted to cry. Well done.

Very straightforward and I see what you're getting at. Nice. Personally I'd rather say, "Why does it matter so badly?" but anyway! Well done. *LIKED*

Where would you guys like this thing to go?

I Liked this. Like "LIKE". Anyway, if you're looking for a nice little saying, you can't have a rainbow without rain. You've gotta cry before you sing. Bye! Well done.

Hero here! I slightly disagree ClaraKingofSnow. But I love your poem and don't want it changed. So instead, let's get the title. *LIKED*

This was nice. Very nice. There were a few repetitive parts mainly involving the word "insect". Otherwise, very nice.

Are you gonna post this?

I don't know. When I heard the name it rocked. Every part of this, even your word choice and every B and P in your story worked. So... much... power! ...

Percy Jackson and the Olympians Maximum Ride The Quantum Prophecy

Adding on, I'd describe the battered up Toyota, whether in dialogue or what.

Hero here to review! Look, I really couldn't find anything up with your story. I like your dialogue narration, I'd continue with that. Looking forward to the next part. *Hero ...