Liz

It's kind of hard not to be a fan of religious poetry. It kind of rules out 90% of classical and 30% of modern poetry, doesn't it? Anyway, I quite ...

Great. The chorus was especially good. Only part I didn't like was: "Rock is my life Music is my reason It gets me through the strife Of being me" It ...

Not bad, but I think you need to fix the last line. It seems a little cliched. You also might want to simplify the line "nihilistic rendezvous, voyeur boys peeking" ...

This needs a lot of work. I'm sure you can fix it up. At the moment you've got a load of sentences which could belong to anyone. Are we supposed ...

I like it. Only problem for me was the "I tell you" in the last line. Either take it out or change it to something else. It just doesn't seem ...

:) Yep, the word "exquisiteness" does exist. This wasn't bad. But I can't tell a lot from such a short snippet. I think you need to check over the grammar, ...

Not bad. I think you need to work on the imagery, metaphors, etc, because that's what makes a poem stand out in the end. You had something good in the ...

Last stanza is good, yep. You probably need to think about line breaks a bit more, try to end a line with a noun or something, makes it read better. ...

I really like this, the personal tone, everything. There are a few problems, some of which uniaeca pointed out. Also, I think you should re-think some parts like "but i’m ...

Pretty good. I have a problem with some lines, however, where you repeat half of the line above, e.g. He speaks, and his voice echoes Echoes throughout the void to ...

I like this. The style is fine for me, I find it raw and good to read because long lines are often cluttered. The tone in this is great. I ...

I like it. The only problem was that it didn't seem to be too original. When the boy is talking at the end, it gets a bit obvious. Try and ...

I don't think it's bad at all! I really enjoyed it, you have a great plot and it's very well-written. The only problem I think, is that you occassionally use ...

I like this, but I think it could be even better if you expanded on it and worked it into a story. It's not the most original of ideas - ...

I really like it. However, there are some grammatical errors and stuff that makes it really confusing to read. You switched back and forth between the mum and dad being ...