Livinginfantasy

Oh yeah, I knew this was going to be great (judging by Part 1). You already know I love your description. I feel like I'm there. Your characters are relatable, ...

Woah! :shock: That was great! I see you've done some editing, and judging by the comments, you fixed it up quite well. The description, like everyone else has said, was ...

It's okay, but I don't think you handled the transitions very well. For example: “No. At least, not yet… I told them about what I thought about it, how much ...

Short and sweet... I like that. Like gamechnger said: umm...your third and fourth lines are the only ones that don't rhyme... maybe you tried that, i don't know its your ...

Awww... I love it! As Max said, your imagery was excellent. I think that was the best part. Your intro was gorgeous and I heard your voice throughout the whole ...

Hi (again)! Hmmm, I have to say that content-wise, this is one of your better poems. You should try changing the intro, or just taking it out altogether. Too Overused. ...

Hey Sportgurl! Remember me? Nice job! This was a very nice poem. Like in "Bruises", I hear your voice and feel for you. I see you always manage to do ...

I'm not going to be another broken record, cause everyone else basically stole the words from under my fingertips, but yeah, this... HORR-I-BLE! And one more thing, I don't think ...

At first, I couldn't get past those two stanzas... But, I forced myself to read on, just so I could review and hope to give some helpful advice. My heart ...

Love it! It was well written, and a powerful message. Bravo! And I agree with tennisprincess; interviews and more direct quotes would definitely improve this alot more... but it doesn't ...

Bravo! As you can tell, I liked it alot. The word choice... very nice. But there's one thing... Read this aloud, please: I Don't Think Making Some Of The Words ...

Very nice, very nice indeed! Oh yeah! I'm glad she punched him! Too bad I don't think that'll solve anything... :( Any who, as I said before, Very well done. ...

First, I must say: That first stanza has got to go! Not only was it lacking, but it was confusing! I don't know if anyone else had this problem, but ...

Ahh! I've written your review but accidentally pressed the back button, and now have to start all over again! ughhh! and spills across the room in fiery animalistic passion, a ...

Hmmm... I believe that this isn't much of a poem. You should try: 1) Adding a better structure and stanzas. 2) Using metaphors, similes, the five (or maybe even six?) ...