LittleFox

From the first senstence I really liked this a lot. First off though-"His father smiled loving back at him." I would change 'loving' to 'lovingly.' "The little boy giggle uncontrollably" ...

Ah, I know I can definatly relate with this character. You did a lovely job creating a very realistc situation and making it interesting.A lot of people would make the ...

Very dark and very beautiful all at the same time. I enjoy the simple sensory details you use in the first half. These days details are often overused and oversold ...

This is very good work! The details are beautiful and described with mush mastery and talent. I really love this story!The mood is very sweet and in a way, mysterious. ...

Aw, Its very sad to me when couples fight. I think many can relate to the feeling thee sisters have. When I was young my best friend (Who was like ...

I like this way of writing a lot. Creating and painting a story with nothing but dialogue- thats something you have to have talent for :) I would have liked ...

I really like this a lot :) and I love the name, for what ever reason it really drew me in. I like the voice in this very much. It ...

This is a very sweet poem. And well crafted also. There is a little mistake on line 6. "Your are" So just touch that up and it'll be fine :) ...

This is very lovely while also very dark. I love it! The way you wove the words together to make such a charming yet sad friendship is well, perfect. I ...