Lini-chan

Thanks, all of you. I'll take what you said into consideration. The second chapter should be up soon.

Yeah, now that I read it again, I did use tersely a lot. Apparently I was having a subconscious fetish for the word at that particular moment. :) Thanks for ...

Whoops, that was a typo I didn't notice. Thanks for telling me that. I'm glad you like it, and I'll tell you when the next part's done.

Thanks for reading it. I'm glad you liked it. I'll take what you said into consideration. :)

Incredibly accurate...wow. Males just don't quite know how it's like. It was very good, and I liked it a lot! Can't think of anything more to say.

Okay, everybody ready? 1...2...3...Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! That was so cute! And now I'm hungry for soup!

Well, the first thing that sticks out to me is that there is no punctuation...and that just irks me. Commas, semicolons, periods...they are all friends of poets that should be ...

It made me laugh! I liked it. It is nonsensical, but in a good way.

Thanks again for reading it! I will edit the first one. I'm glad you liked it!

I liked it! It was cute and funny!

Thanks so much for critiquing it! You both caught a lot of things that I might have missed (i.e., the two "almost"s in one sentence. That was probably a typo ...

Yeah, I wasn't aiming to be serious, because those aspects of the Internet aren't really serious. I mean, the majority of what goes on in Myspace is high school drama ...

I'll post the next chapter come the weekend, because I'm so bogged down with homework right now that I don't have much time to. But it will be up soon!

I'll try to describe the background more in the next draft. Thanks for the advice!

I write lyrics too. And the good thing about lyrics is that they're easier to set to music. Just write whatever kind of poetry you're good with most of the ...