Lilicia

Hi there! So this is a very good piece. I think that how you described the whole out-of-control-horse thing was excellent. (even though I've never actually been on a horse, ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I hope you learn to love it as much as I do :D I'm Lilicia *shakes hand* Okay, so on to the review! First off, ...

Hi there! Aww this is sweet. I like it. Corrections in red and suggestions in bold : "Where's he at?" asks my sister, Misty, as we wait at the airport ...

Hi there! This is great, the emotions are so clear, and it's beautifully written. How you described the crash was excellent. My only criticism would be about Morgan and Stephen. ...

Hi! This is an interesting concept, and a good idea for a story. Just a few nitpicks: slut, bitch and hore *whore Maybe he ment just for that day *meant ...

Hi! I liked this, it's a very gripping story. Corrections in red, suggestions in bold :) I felt a cold chill rush up my spine as the darkness touched my ...

Hi! Woah that was kind of creepy :shock: It was good, and I was definitly surprised at the outcome *shudders* Onto the nitpicks: David watched the girl passing alongside his ...

Hi! This is interesting and kept my attention to the very end, so good job. A few nitpicks: “COME IN,” Try to avoid capitals: it is distracting and not very ...

Hi! This is a great story - it's gripping from the start, and I love the idea. Just a few nitpicks: All of it was too awful to for my ...

Hi! So this a good story in terms of consistancy in your writing, and it is written in such a way that it is easy to read, so good job ...

Hi! This is interesting - you captured Dai's emotions just right. However, there are a few nitpicks: He slowly registered a high pitch whine coming from his left, he glanced ...

Hi! This is good - I really loved the descriptions. Good job! It kind of like a story that a woman is reading and I am not sure how to ...

Hi! I haven't written a review in ages, so forgive me if this isn't great... Anyway, here goes! So I really liked the beginning, the questions and short answers are ...

Hello! Thank you for the second review, very encouraging! :) Ok, so here goes: Seeing as Lumierre already pointed out the nitpicks, I won't bother with those. This is a ...

Hi! This is a very interesting and original story. I like it, especially the MC's chatty tone. :mrgreen: Just a few nitpicks... I don’t know whether I’ve been to Florida, ...