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Re: The Path of Youth
Wow, very enigmatic. I love it. I just saw your message. I like the formatting, putting the last word by itself, and making a meta ABBCB formatting with the stanzas ...
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Re: Chasm
Wow! Hate to say it but my first thought was MINECRAFT. I like this a lot. So many profound statements, most especially the last two lines and 'her/god'. Very excellent. ...
Aug 8, 2021 -
Re: i am not your daughter
Dang I like this a lot. Your pacing, your flow from emotion to emotion is very powerful. The message is poignant. The metaphor of a life preserver is well executed, ...
Aug 3, 2021 -
Re: I'm in literal pain mama,
This is so good! I feel the same. My only critique is in the last paragraph, I think circulating air throws off the poem rhythmically, switches the attention momentarily to ...
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Re: Warm Saturday Mornings
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Jun 9, 2021
I think I get it. The coffee is ‘worldliness’ or whatever, right? I feel the same. My parents wouldn’t let me listen to my music, see my friends, or even ... -
Re: (thoughts swim [together) is a forgotten state]
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Jun 9, 2021
Wow I like what you did there loll I also love the tone that underpins all of your poems, or maybe it’s the writing style, it gives me a certain ... -
Re: everything i carry home
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Jun 2, 2021
There’s a lot of genius in here—raw emotion indescribable by a thousand words, but given here between the lines. I could use a little more tension myself. Just yank it, ... -
Re: Paracosmist
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May 28, 2021
This is beautiful. It’s ironic, how the world in her head feels so much more real, but it is, the light shines through everything and fantasy is the poor man's ... -
Re: potato shirt
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May 28, 2021
Turkey Joebob picked an apple. The Apple turned around and said, “hey kid, I’m the king of the apples around here”. WHAT?! He had arms and legs!! “Can you help ... -
Re: Ugly Feelings
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May 28, 2021
I feel that Actually I was wondering the same thing. The other day I realized that I wasn’t myself, and that my emotions were just not present. I think it’s ... -
Re: skydiving as a metaphor for love
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May 27, 2021
Beautiful sensory work. I love this type of poem, where you’re addressing something so deep, as explained by the blurb, but have such a myriad of feelings coursing through its ... -
Re: The Story Of An Introvert-3
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May 27, 2021
Same typos and disbelievable grammar, but I like how you are developing the relationships between the last few chapters, I can see the story slowly forming, although the pace is ... -
Re: The Story Of An Introvert-2
Great writing, again, and although your characters aren’t deep (yet), they are comprehensible and entertaining. Your word choice is great, but I can only attribute the overly academic language to ...
May 27, 2021 -
Re: The Story Of An Introvert-1
Dang, good writing. I like how the introvert is quick with words and handles herself in social situations, and I like how you don’t make too big a deal out ...
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Re: the weight of twenty years
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May 27, 2021
Masterful. The flow and rhymes are excellently selected, the topic and words are passionate and relatable, and you shove the physical into the heart. I might go ahead and read ...
