Liaya

Haha, I read this while listening to "Not Human" from Pan's Labyrinth. I didn't even mean to, but added to your skill with words it made this rather chilling to ...

Okay, Liaya here to review! This went great. You smoothed things out nicely and it was easy to picture what was going on without getting bored of the information. I ...

Oh man, I SOO want to read more....I already read the first chapter and Griffin told me where to find this. IT IS AMAZING! I just want you to know ...

Wow, cool twist at the end! I want to know more...I want to know the back story of what happened to cause this fight! The poem is well imaged, and ...

Haha, yeah, I think Sushi picked this apart pretty effectively. So let me just tell you, I really like it, actually! I love Japan, and if you can manage to ...

Now I REALLY want to know more! This is a tense place to end it! Your writing is going more smoothly and I'm enjoying it tremendously. I like the kind ...

This is an intriguing beginning! I want to know more. Your writing is fluent and fun to read and your prologue is a good fishhook to pull people in. I ...

This is lovely! I don't think it's too sentimental at all. Rather, I think the sentiment is just what it needs. The descriptions are beautiful and soft-hearted and really show ...

Oh my gosh, I love this! I was grinning within the first few lines. It's funny and it manages to twist our minds around your little finger. Its so darned ...

THIS IS AMAZING! When I first clicked on your story, I was feeling kind of tired. I saw that it was longer than a few paragraphs and I wasn't going ...

Wow, this is powerful. I really like it; your rhythm has a life of its own, and you use it so you don't need any kind of formal structure. I ...

Once again, I love your poem! This is such a sweet and slightly sad love story. I really like how you were missing things that were presently happening; it gave ...

I love this! The way you compare everything to music really had an effect on me, because music is an indispensable part of my life. (I also loved your reference ...

Righto! Well, I think this is an impressive beginning to a story. It's remarkable how well you've portrayed the characters so far and I think that is very important. Your ...

Right! Once again, I find this idea intriguing, and it just got better! My complaints are basically the same as with your first chapter; it's hard to keep track of ...