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Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 2.1
Yay! Alright, this week I am here to review (at least a bit) "She hadn’t seen her orderly so angry since something else happened wherein he’d stand up for a ...
Mar 12, 2017 -
Re: The Chosen Grandma, Chapter 1.1
Yaaaay! Another chapter! That's what I like getting home to from my holidays. Alright, as it IS review day, I will give you a little review. I love the way ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: A Life Like Them... ?
Hi, here to review! This part here: She is holding a new book which she just bought from the street titled, seems a bit repetitive. About the title of the ...
Aug 21, 2016 -
Re: Never Alone
Hi, here to review! I really liked it, the writing seemed easy and was clearly understandable. You created a scene I could clearly see in my mind. The foreshadowing with ...
Aug 6, 2016 -
Re: PARADOX- Prolougue
Hi, here to review this little piece of yours! ^^ Of course there isn't much to go on yet, as this is a prologue and you've done it in this ...
Aug 6, 2016 -
Re: The Country Life
Hi, here to leave you a review. The others before me have already mentioned a lot, so I'll spare you reading something twice and just tell you the things I ...
Jun 29, 2016 -
Re: While We Wait For the Moon to Fall
Hi, here to review! I loved this piece, the flow of words, the rythm of the sentences. You really did creat a wonderful short story. It's a bit late where ...
Jun 28, 2016 -
Re: The Bitten Boy
Hi, here to review! In the beginning, it's clear through the dialogue that they are at a party, but then it goes right to driving home. You could maybe set ...
Jun 28, 2016 -
Re: (1) The Sorrows of Young Writer May 15
Hi! Here to review! Nitpicking: "eventually I have woke up as me" should be "woken up" Other than that: wow, I really liked that! The subject is dark and complex ...
Apr 14, 2016 -
Re: Beyond the Hope - Chapter 1
Hi!, going to review little things as I go and then give you my overall feeling about the piece once I'm done. "She thought back what she done this morning." ...
Apr 14, 2016 -
Re: Country Boy: Chapter 4, part 2
I liked it, as always. It flowed well, and I'm glad you found back into the writing with (what seems like) ease. The only thing I have to point out ...
Feb 5, 2012 -
Re: Country Boy: Chapter 3, part 2
CLC! I thought this was a good ending to the chapter. There didn't happen to much, but I thought you handled the not-so-much-happening very well. Alas, I found something that ...
Oct 28, 2011 -
Re: Country Boy: Chapter 3, part 1
Cookie-lemon-cookie!!! Hahahaha... I'll explain later, if you care about the story behind that. I really liked this chapter. I was actually surprised to see Adele perform monologues out of the ...
Oct 27, 2011 -
Re: Bob the Tumor (Part 2 of 2)
Loved it!!! I read the first part and thought that you were either going for a happy ending which would have been pretty sappy (at least if I'd written it... ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Country Boy: Chapter 2, part 2
No fair!! You can't leave us like this!! Come on, I want to go exploring with them! :( *pouts* Anyways, here's something I think you should fix: He half-expected her ...
Oct 21, 2011
