Leja

I love the "blueberry chat room" line!

That makes sense, but that sort of theme isn't apparant in the poem, so it's still a little confusing. Definitely something to explore, though!

This reminds me a lot of the Jabberwock because it's essentially narrative nonsense, but you can still vaguely follow a storyline. If you can take seriously writing 'nonsense', you could ...

*moved to lyrics*

To alleviate confusion? Ciao, everyone! Even though most of you just responded to say that you didn't understand, I'm still glad you left a comment because it forced me to ...

Of course multiple ideas and opinions matter; that's the very nature of criticism. Maybe someone else will look at this poem and know exactly what you're trying to say. Maybe ...

Yes, it is a rather silly poem, but that doesn't mean silliness can't be taken seriously! ^_^ Catch a few more images with Cupid's arrow and this could be a ...

Please don't double post. Comments for this poem should resume in the original thread *locked*

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Hey RandomGrrl! (sorry it took me so long to get to this!) I must say, I had a hard time getting into the story. It began with a lot of ...

[017. Cheek :: Take Two :: Blanched] “Gail, I don’t know how Olivie managed to cook this, but it’s wonderful,” Rosanne said. She turned to her daughter and smiled. “And ...

I found the "Thanks a lot, George" somewhat irritating. Perhaps you could also separate "system" and "Jenny" to make it clearer that this is a new idea. Yeah, I'll definitely ...

The literature forums are only for original works created by the poster. If you would like to share or discuss a quote please do so in the Lounge or in ...

'peaces' does make sense. surely if you realize that i was comparing wars to 'games', you would be able to make sense of the word 'peaces'. *sigh*...it's really quite frustrating ...