Leja

If you hadn't blatantly stated that this is about war, I probably would not have known. That is not something to aim for. In fact, if a poem cannot stand ...

This is not a poem; this is a string of questions that even you don't seem to take seriously. Poetry is wonderful in that it allows you to share your ...

B is here again ^_^ I love the imagery here, how each word advances the last. It's very pleasant (even if the vampire is not, haha). Some points of confusion: ...

I am very very happy to see a poem dealing with prayer that is not a reiteration of worship songs (which are nice for church and singing, but not always ...

I see exactly what you mean by navelgazing and I felt that too as I was writing it. But... I guess the emotions that I'm trying to pen are too ...

If you were to write out the list of what happens, it would go something like: 1. Strangle 2. Crush 3. Accumulate 4. Feed 5. Devour 6. What's left (sorry ...

Dear sister - look at me - can we speak, on matters of the heart? I think you'll find I have some wisdom to impart. The questioning of "can we ...

This whole poem seems completely addressed to a single person; something written specifically for them that only they will "get". Reading, I feel like I've intruded on something private, but ...

He was the people. This reminds me of Hamlet, in which the king's body functions as a metaphor for the entire kingdom ^_^ the voice and the primary object in ...

I like the wording of "wheezily" in the first stanza! :D Up until the third stanza, there isn't much happening. It's a lot of description of scenery, which is fine, ...

The problem with the repetition is that, while it's cute, it begins to devalue any romantic feelings about halfway through. It becomes formulaic, like giving a generic valentines card instead ...

Life is an ungodly thing - so much negative energy would destroy one god as it will destroy our species, one bullet one cry one stab in the dark. There ...

Okay, her eyes are doing all these things, but so what? :wink: This is a poem all about this girl's eyes, but I think it would be more meaningful if ...

My perfect world Is the world of night Why is death always equated with night? I see the connection between death and darkness, and darkness with night, but death to ...

The thing is, for a poem about emotion, there are absolutely no emotional qualities to it. You see the after effects of the emotion --hatred, jokes, crying, etc. -- but ...