Leja

I like very much. It all seems so crisp and airy, talking about a world that's so far away and nonspecific, but still somehow tangible. I like how the words ...

Everything is in such a sad tone! I don't know if I'm just noticing this of if it's been prevelant throughout. In the case of the grief counselor, the things ...

I found this poem to be rather a disappointment, actually. By your warning, I expected something shocking, something that I've never heard before, that would make me sit up straighter ...

So basically? I lurveee how this is divided into sections. It's this nice mix of viewpoints and the added bonus of actually advancing the actions, which all too many multiple-viewpoint ...

This is a very vague poem. The "you" is undefined, there's a lot of "it"s and "there"s. How could anyone relate if it's not specific enough for them to catch? ...

Aloha, Faerlan! First, look through your transitions between phrases/ sentences. The first line, for example, I think that you should end with a semicolon (because each phrase can stand on ...

The first stanza seems a little disconnected. Each phrase seems to halt at the end, rather than skip to the next one. Like Chevy, I have a hard time finding ...

This is too general to incite any kind of feeling in a person. It's all in the "not being able to do anything" that will evoke something. A motivational speaker ...

Tennis, yes? This has a nice, hurried feeling to it that works well as a whole. Just make sure you watch the rhythm; some of the lines had a lot ...

My problem with this poem is that I finish it saying "so what? Good for the narrator, I guess". It doesn't say anything new about the subject. It's a long ...

The whole point of this poem is a set up for the last two lines. And that makes me wonder why the rest of this poem is there. Free yourself ...

I like the first italization of smiling because it makes it sound wonderfully repulsive. I’ve been doing nothing, really --why ask?— and yes, my mother is doing all right. I ...

(a quick note on the title: the use of "1st" instead of "first" in this context comes off as lazy. Numbers up to one hundred should generally be spelled out.) ...

This is lovely. The description is light and careful, and there is just the right combination for pacing of action and description. "The water below, So endless and inviting, Is ...

The one way to guarantee I (and, I assume, many others) don't want to read something is to put something cutesy in the title. Like a heart. Especially in Romantic ...