Leahweird

The echoic echoing? hall lent it’s acoustic s to the bouncing and dripping of tears . T he deep pants for breath and the blur of uneven syllabus syllables? , ...

i think I can guess that song this was based off of (Love it). This piece is so delightful! You can tell they love eachother so much. It's in every ...

I really like this. The plot looks like its going to be interesting, and you have a really nice style. I love the way you managed to describe everyhting while ...

Another great chapter! I have nothing constructive to add really. I just wanted to express my enjoyment. I really like how natural Key's stream of conciousness seems. I like how ...

This story reminded me of Beowolf. I am a huge Beowulf fangirl, so yay! However, I would say that since this is supposed to be a translation of a language ...

You have the beggining of a very interesting story her. I think it could use for information to start out with. THe fantasy genre requires a lot of stage setting, ...

One og the things I really love about formatting is that you can do anything you want as long as it sounds good. This poem has a really nice rythem. ...

Short does not equal uninteresting, and this piece is far from boring. It does get hard to read at time though. I would recommened breaking up each seperate idea, even ...

I was about to comment that you need to mark each section better, but then I realized that you have posted what looks to be three identical versions of chapter ...

I think you piece could benefit from some set up. I have problems with this myself, so I'm the pot calling the kettle black, but I think we need to ...

I found that the action was a lot easier to follow this time around, and it was just as thrilling. I think your work shows you've been listening to past ...

I really like this chapter, especially all the attention paid to the dragons. (I am a fangirl). One thing I noticed though, "a mute point" should actually be "moot." Minor ...

I feel like these two lines "It felt like the end of the world; death stalked people down alleyways until he caught them in his cold unforgiving grasp." should have ...

This piece has the potential to be really powerful. I liked it, but I think your rhyming scheme is a hindrance more than a help. The first stanza especially has ...

Hello! This is a really neat poem. My favourite line is "live with the candle's friend", although I'm not sure I understand it. At first I was confused. Wouldn't the ...