Lauren2010

That was....interesting. I'd like to say I liked it. But I don't really know. It didn't flow very well. But that may have been the point. You spelled special as ...

Wow, I've been following this story and I have to say it is very good. I don't have any grammer related issues, and the rest I'd say is terrific. I ...

Hey this is really interesting. I definatly get those same ideas when I have writers block for other stories. I have at least four stories started that haven't been worked ...

Haha that was so awesome. "Where's me toast?" lol I didn't see many issues other than the unrealistic ability to have death on stage with toast and coffe machines flying ...

Hmm interesting. It seemed a little twilighty at first but then kind of took a different angle. It has potential. I hope your not going for the whole twilight think ...

Christopher the kind vampire. I like it. A few suggestions: First off, since you are dealing with the whole vampire/werewolf thing please try not to make it too twilighty. I ...

Hey, here I am again =). So this was good too. It kept me interested and its still keeping me guessing a little so i want more. Thats good, you ...

Hmmm nice preface. It pulls you into the story without giving much away. It hooks you and makes you want more. Good job! I really like your use of detail. ...

Interesting so far. I like how the main character narrates and how the two other characters were developed well. I do agree that Cassie is majorly underdeveloped for being the ...

ooo nice. haha, i really like it. It's pretty intense which is good that you can write that way without it sounding cheesy. You just have to make sure you ...

Okay so, I would love to read this, but.. it is very very long. Like meadowlark above said, it scares people off. maybe try splitting it into 2 or 3 ...

Woah. That's so creepy. But in a good way! It's a different type of story, which is good. Variety is the spice of life they say. I didn't understand exactly ...

Wow that took a turn I wasn't expecting. Good! I read the prolgue and was a little afraid of the cliche romance novel thing myself. (me and my best friend ...

Aside from a few grammar and spelling errors (which have already been pointed out so i wont repeat them) this is pretty good. I really like the names you have. ...

First, this is good. I haven't read any other parts of this story or the pre-edited version of this chapter but it's a good beginning in general. There weren't many ...