Lauren

Hi Megan! Welcome to the site and I hope you like it here so far. x] That night was when the nightmares began. I dreamt [s]that[/s] I was in Andrea's ...

it's very a very slow process though, seeing as I'm working for some exams Tell me about it! :( Hi, I'm Lauren! This looks good, so I'll give it a ...

Sela Locke! TLGS does return at last! And well worth the wait. Yay, this was brilliant. Action packed but full of description, imagery... Your writing always has such an amiable ...

Hi, Angel :] Well, there's nothing like a controversial story to budge me into critique-mode. This deals with homosexuality, so if you're uncomfortable with this subject don't read this. How ...

Hi :] I won't nit-picks, as those before me have covered that. But I do agree with Blink on one point, and it is something that stood out: next to ...

Hi :) So, I'm going to nit-pick as I read through, and then give a little summary at the end, okay? I asume now more then ever I held an ...

Hi :] I thought I should critique something of yours, as I haven't before. Her scrunched up grinning freckled face was in the papers Yeah, I see what you're going ...

All the mistakes in grammar/spelling/general have been mentioned already, so this is gonna be one of those useless "I loved your story" posts! x] But yeah, I loved your story. ...

Hi :D It's so good to read something of yours at last , Kirsten! It is always a great pleasure. Btw, don't worry about 'returning the favour'... you have critiqued ...

'Twas not light or bubbly one bit. The mood captured is perfect. It has a kind of Jodi Picoult-like quality, in its evident realism. There is only thing thing I ...

Hi there, 200397 ! :smt039 Well, what can I say? This is fantastic, that's what. Really. Truly. I'm not the sort of person who exaggerates. The imagery was pungent, heady... ...

Why the separate paragraph for every line??? It's a real challenge for my poor eyeballs... Right, now I've got that little grumble out of the way, onwards with the story! ...

Nice. So it lacked desciption, imagery, soul, depth, all that... But I suppose that was the point, hmm? It made me smile :) I can't really criticise much, which rather ...

Hi and welcome, Saphire_earthguardian! Good for you, trying a new type of fiction. I myself can't stand fantasy fiction, so I'm glad this isn't it. Nit-picks I feel perfectly fine ...

Hi, Explosive_Pen :) Just a quick review here. I watched as the rain blurried you mean 'blurred', right? the image outside the window, distorting the trees and sky. The clouds ...