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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Stars

    Hi big brother!!!!!!!!!!!! static glimmers too far whats a static glimmer? to reach for - to hold loves! 'tween aspiration and disbelief. I'm not sure if I like this part. ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: *deleted*

    Hello. Here as requested!! Nitpicks: 1. The boy exited his vehicle as he walked toward the house. He opened the house’s mailbox and placed the letters in. He stared at ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Take A Chance- 8 (part two)

    I honestly didn't find any nitpicks to do in this chapter. Honestly. So we are going to skip the nitpicks all together. Grammar: I really saw improvements in this chapter. ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Take A Chance- 8 (part 1)

    Hello Oth er one! It's me pointe for a review!!!! Nitpicks: 1. woke up the morning after, looking really bad. As I looked at my reflection in the mirror facing ...

    Jan 26, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hazel-chapter 4

    Hi!! here for the last chapter, so far. YEA! I have enjoyed reviewing it so much! Nitpicks: 1. pushed the covers of herself OFF herself? 2. halo. She yawned. "Good ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hazel-chapter 3

    Hi Saks! Right off the bat, I can tell I will have some nitpicks for this chapter. 1. Adalyn lay on the soft red couch, unable to sleep. WAIT! is ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hazel- chapter 2

    Hello! here for ch. 2!!! Nitpicks: 1. whoa, no nitpicks! This is so good, I have no nitpicks.. Thats a first. Well then I guess I'm off to chapter 3: ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hazel- chapter 1

    Hi Saks! Here to review ch. 1!!! yea! *dances* okay, lets get started. :pirate: Nitpicks: (you know how I work by now XD) 1. Aurialla lifted him up so she ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Hazel-prologe *Edited*

    Hi Saks! Its me again! I have decided to review all of Hazel {so far} cause I need points.XD and I love reviewing your work!!! Nitpicks: 1. The daughter of ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A reason, A season

    Hi Saks!!!!!!! It's me pointe, here to do a review!!! So its your first attemt at poetry... *strokes beard* I'll go hard on ya' then XD Nitpicks: 1. For poppy's ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Cartora (Chapter 3)

    Hi Mikko!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! here as requested!! So, I am going to do an overall, then go to our joint account and do nit-picks okay? its a win-win-win! Grammar: Pretty good, I ...

    Jan 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Something in my closet

    Hello! I am Pointe and I will be reviewing you today!!! There's something in my closet, A nd it's growing quite loud , I t giggles and it scratches . ...

    Jan 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Forget the World~1

    OHMIGOSH! I love it. I seriously do. The grammar is correct, everything. You got the dialogue correct, and even made it feel believeble. You made me want to scream at ...

    Jan 24, 2011
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Once Again

    Hi! here for your requested review! first of all congrats on the green! thoughts: 1)this could easily be a novel. A very GOOD novel. Consider that.... 2) your choice of ...

    Jan 21, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Draw Near To Me Chapters 6-7

    Hi Allie, Here to review you! POINTS OF THE REVIEW: 1)First of all, this is really fast. Your speeding through it, and we don't get to register things before you ...

    Jan 17, 2011


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