LadyPurple

Thanks! I was like half asleep while writing this lol. Does it show? O_O Half asleep? No, it doesn't show a bit! When I'm writing half asleep mine is pretty ...

I'm gonna work on the description today. So, I'll be back to edit this. Thank you to KR and WickedWonder!

in the her beautiful round eyes I think there was a mistake here. Hi again NewHero! Sorry I am showing my nose where nobody call me but could you... tell ...

Your beginning is what will rope the reader in, and your wasn't that strong. To be honest, and no offense, but it was quite cliche. I know.... I suck at ...

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If you have writer's block, try listening to music (lyricless songs usually work for me) or going on a walk. I don't have it right now it was just a ...

LadyPurple, First, thanks for your input. I'm really bad at spelling so that might explain all the mistakes. And I wasn't trying for a cliff hanger its just were I ...

This poem flows smoothly, and It is very nice. I wish there was something more for me to say but there really isn't.

Hi Soulsaver. Welcome to YWS! Anyway, you've got some fairly good help from the people above me so all I have to say is: I like this poem. The rhyming ...

Haha. I love it. Good job, Tam. ~Ladypurple~

That's a really sweet story. I can't find anything really wrong with this. I wrote a series of bedtime stories for a girl I enjoyed. She's gone, but the words ...

Hey. I couldn't find any errors in this! I like this. I like that you told how the other planets couldn't do much. Very creative, Good job! ~Ladypurple.

Hey there Persephoneia. I'll be reviewing your poem today! I’m so sorry for your heart. I thought that sounded funny (in a good way.) I hope you keep writing! ~Ladypurple.

Hiya Allmixedup. I'll be your reviewer for today. Well all I really have to sya is that you need to capitalize those "I"s. The flow goes pretty well. I like ...

Wow. I love the flow and it doesn't even feel forced *gasp*! The emotion is really powerful and the rhythm is good. I can't write poems as good as this. ...