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I don't normally like to read about a teacher-student affair (unless it's not much of an age difference.) But I kind of enjoyed this. Notre Amour Inerdit I'd love to ...

Hiya Ikafe. I gotta say, I can relate an itty bit to the song. But I did find one nit-pick. Hearing the waves crush Try crash. Crush doesn't quite sound ...

Hiya Hellokittyfreak777. There isn't much to say when others have said things already. well I like how you jump into the story but... It seems kind of vauge. I'm pretty ...

Don't be so hard on yourself, Kyllorac. It's not that bad really. I just found a little nit-pick. The pieces of self that But this part just sounds kinda weird ...

Very nice Elinor! I normally like storms for some weird reason. I like the sensory language you used. But it's summer; the rain is warm, so you won't freeze. You ...

Hiya Kylan. Yes, this is good Sunday reviewing material. I just knew Protokype would comment on this. :P Anyway, I found some spots in need of work. Y ou pronounce ...

I ike it the way it is. By the way thanks for telling me that you posted this. It's really nice and I hope you write more of it! Anyway ...

Hiya. I gotta say this is really pretty and creative. I just have one thing to say though. You didn't capitalize your "I"s a few times. That's all that needs ...

Very truthful. I like it. I know a lot of girls like this I had a friend kinda like that and now we grew apart because of some of the ...

Unfortunately I have writers block. You are not alone with that. So anyway. I think it's too late to point out spots in need of corrections because people have already ...

Hey Melsmall94. Welcome to YWS. I can really relate to the poem and it's real truthful about the world. But I did find some parts in need of work. The ...

I think I've went through my "I know it all" phase back in 6Th grade... But still, don't worry about not rhyming. My poems rarely ever rhyme. If they do ...

Hey again Jake. Ok I just wanna point out some spots where you messed up with punctuation. Blue is the errors. [rapped or sung fast] W here’s the originality all ...

When I clicked preview to see what I typed I found out that Retro had reviewed and posted while I was typing.... But I hope this helps anyway with punctuation. ...

Yes this happens to all of us when our minds are somewhere else. Anyway, the only errors I see is that at some parts when you should have put "you're" ...