LadyMysterio

Hey, let me start by saying that you are very good at describing things it really gives youa good "word' picture. I like how describe the colors or feelings of ...

Hey, there where a lot of cool, supencefull moments in this chapter. I loved how you wrote Clandestine emotions after she accidentally tells them that the the egg was stolen. ...

Hey, very cool story, so far, especially the fight scene! I like how you have so many paragraphs throughout the (fight) scene, it keeps the reader on their feet. (Hehe ...

This is a really good story I like how you described how Ala felt in the beginning of the chapter. It really helps the reader. understand her feelings about moving. ...

Hey, it's Lady Mysterio again. It's weird that this hasn't gotten any reviews yet? I"ll try and make this one, so you've got at least one. The story seems pretty ...

Hey good story! I love the title. I like how you switch from Patricks to, Treego's perspective, I find it's an interesting way to tell a story, as you get ...

Hello, The part about violet telling her to stick the bread crumbs together is a bi confusing. It doesn't seem to fit into the story, it could just be that ...

Hello, cool story idea. I noticed that you left out, by mistake i assume, the part where aspen catches the first deer, there is a weird gap there. The part ...

First off, what a Cliff hanger! I personally love a good plot twist. I love the fourteen year old phones obsessed daughter, there most certainly is one on every family. ...

Hello! first off let me say that the part about the cat being engaged made me laugh out loud. Is a very cool story, I like how she has the ...

First off let me say i love the shadow men! I also though it was cool how the forest made a path for them to walk through. I do have ...

Hey, cool story! There are a few thing i noticed while reading it though This is something i have done multipule times, whenever you put a your, if its for ...

Hello! A very nice story over all, but there are a few sentences that could use a , or two. I love the part where Clandestine goes down to get ...