LOLLIPOPGIRL030

This was really good! I couldn't really find anything wrong with it. I like how you word your sentences, like this for example; “I hate what I am – what ...

This is very good! I like your plot so far and where this seems to be going. In this sentnce, 'I wasn’t too sure where that knowledge came from, but ...

I like this so far. It's good, just like every other piece you've written thats on here. :) I'm intrested to see where you're going with this. It flows smoothly ...

I liked this. :D I agree that the paragraphs should be a wee bit smaller, but everything else looked good. You had just enough discriptive words to describe what was ...

All right, what do you expect me to say? It was good, but I expected that from you. :D You have a way with the words that you write and ...

This was great. I think you described the jail really well, considering all jails dont look the same. :D I liked the cliffhanger at the end. Although I hated that ...

This chapter was really good. I get what you mean about it being diffcult to write the physical scenes. Althought, you did an amazing job. My face felt hot the ...

Really good, just like always. :lol: You can tell that their relationship is changing, but not to fast, which is good. Just like Anna said, it's like you're describing a ...

I really liked this chapter. :D The whole concept is really twisted, but in a good way. Edward and Jessica? Edward being human period was enough to keep me reading! ...

The suspense is really killing me. This story is great, as usual. :D The whole concept seems realistic, which makes the plot even better, in my opinion. You should consider ...

Call me blonde, but I didn't know they had a website for a names nationality. :D Anyway, this is one of the best pieces of work I've read on here. ...

Ok, Ok, this was kinda funny, but have you ever read Twilight? It might explain why your friends like Edward Cullen so much. :lol: What about her makes you so ...

Oh, the suspension was killing me! This chapter was as good as the last one, which i loved, by the way. :D The war was unexpected, but it fit pretty ...

I really liked this. :D I've read your other stories, and I've learned to NEVER assume things cause I usually get surprised. :lol: It does sound a bit like little ...

I didn't find much wrong with it, but there were a few mistakes. This sentence doesn't sound right. Plus, you never start a sentence with a conjunction. "And use it ...