LMJRayner

Thanks for reviewing, you've got some really good point about description, especially regarding the warm and homely feel section. It's hard to keep the piece under 1,500 words and also ...

Thanks for the review. Very informative, it is the first draft so these sort of things are to be expected. The change in POV would usually have a series of ...

Hi Lizzy, thanks for the review. Yes there are more chapters, it's a ten chapter book. A short novel. I completed it a while back but I haven't had a ...

Hey thanks, that's some good advice. The reading from an old book is quite a cool idea I might do something with that. Thanks again, LMJ

Thanks a lot, glad you enjoyed it. I've separated some of the paragraphs to make it seem less daunting. Sometimes I don't realise how big they've got :). And referring ...

We're all trying to find who we really are. Sometimes it's the smallest things that point us in the right direction. :)

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Good point it's a big chunk of text hah, thanks for the review! LMJ

Oh okay I get ya, yeah that's a better idea anyway. :)

Thanks for the critique. I already no where I need to make changes, you're right about the show don't tell, although using a blanket philosophy when being creative is never ...

Thanks for the review! And William is the only one talking at the end. Max doesn't say a word :) That's why they're on the same line. LMJ

Haha yeah, that's okay, enjoyed reading them. LMJ

You're very kind to say, I demand that all comments be this awesome :D

Awesome thanks for the review, I've finished all of it now and am drip feeding it into YWS :) I'm glad you liked it! LMJ

Thanks Annaclare, you're always really nice :) The commas thing was probably because I wrote this in one straight session and going back through to edit felt like killing the ...