Kylan

Kamas! Yes, I enjoyed this. I enjoyed it most because it's a complete departure from your usual stuff. It's refreshingly lighter, and kind of quirky. Here, I find a voice ...

Elinor -- I was scanning the forum for a half-way decent poem. I just can't keep repeating myself anymore to people who have no clue what they're doing. So here ...

Navita -- I was wondering when I'd stumble across one of your gems outside of NaPo. I'm sure you've posted something else, but I've never had the pleasure of finding ...

Hey Holly! Thanks for your critique on "Bridges" -- I'm here to return the favor. So, like Navita, I enjoyed this poem for its brevity and sweetness, though, as she ...

Galerius -- I don't care for the poem itself. I'll start off by saying that. It feels heavy, contrived, and the language used is insipid, for the most part. However, ...

This is good. Very apocalyptic, while, at the same time, being grounded on earth, in a relationship between two people. The juxtaposition is nice. You start off strong. Stanza one ...

Mickey, one of the things that I admire most about you is your willingness to experiment with new forms of poetry -- even to the detriment of your own pleasure ...

Hello, This was a good rhyming exercise, and you were definitely able to transport me to a cool, simplified woodland setting. However, I think your meter was a tad off. ...

Interesting. Haikus are difficult to critique, because they are largely personal. Their size lends to a difficulty of mastery, thereby reducing them to scraps that the author will undoubtedly keep ...

Pretty good. Terzanelles have a nice internal metrical sound to them, don't they? I probably won't write one, just because I tend to shy away from rhyming, or structurally constrictive ...

Howler -- A decent effort. Comparing the trials and difficulties of life to a "path through the desert" isn't wholly unoriginal, and so that was refreshing. This is a great ...

Hey Kamas! As requested. My eyes are immediately drawn to the adjectives here. There is a surplus of descriptive words, even by my standards. Some of the adjectives you use ...

Galerius -- There are many good things about this piece. Comprehension-wise, this is an excellent step in the right direction for you. The images are considerably more cohesive, and the ...

Hey Jared, I enjoyed this. Like you said it would be, this was refreshingly simple and nostalgic. You managed to describe things in such a way that they weren't, for ...

Kamas -- I think this suffers from something similar to what some of my poetry falls victim to -- static, still-life. There is no action, there is no movement. Like ...