Krupp

These other two posters basically said what I would've...try to make it a bit more creative; try to describe the fallen heroes, or maybe try describing their exploits in each ...

To be quite honest, I had no idea what the poem was talking about. I mean, I write pretty vaguely as well, but this just completely obscures any ideas the ...

Short and simple...the piece runs well, and I can't see any real glaring errors... Not bad at all. Try to incorporate more imagery if you can next time.

The poem was pretty simple, but in honest truth I really didn't see anything that absolutely needed correcting. So there, take it and run with it. Keep putting stuff out, ...

It's not exactly terrible. People on here just complain a ton. It does do the whole cliche thing with Nerds, but that's actually the only real problem I see here...

A great piece...a grammar problem in the first stanza, but otherwise it works very well. Post more often, will ya?

2Pac had something to say back in the day...before he let his rivalry with Biggie get in the way. Men like that who creat beats and rhymes I have all ...

Honestly it did make me feel better...

I think you should've broken down some of the lines; they didn't sound like they were clicking when read aloud. Besides that it was fine.

I actually wrote a piece very similar to this; it spoke of vines pulling me into a pit. Funny comparison. But it was fine, I guess. Seems more like lyrics ...

How could she laugh if her throat was cut? Never mind. Forget I asked. This seemed more like a Cannibal Corpse song than an emo poem. Sickening to read, but ...

It was a scrambled piece...but that was what made it special, I suppose. Very frantic, very cryptic. It's stuff like this I enjoy reading.

You ask a bit too much questions. Maybe try and answer them. VSN So you're assuming I have the answers to those questions? Why would I ask them if I ...

Ended on a surprisingly good note...Laurel reminded me of Holden Caulfield in many ways...but it was well written for what it was; I really didn't see anything that needed to ...

The second and third stanzas cracked me up...they remind me of when I used to be a kid..nice work. I really don't see anything that absolutely needs to be corrected. ...