Krupp

Why is it every time I see a song like this, Master of Puppets gets stuck in my head? Gaaahh... Simple and to the point. That's what these lyrics are.

thanks for the read. I'll be putting up chapter 2 later on next week.

Er...wrong place to post this, mate. Check the writing section, and put it in one of the fiction sub-forums. That'll get people's attention.

also, maybe try thinking of a different title, the one you have doesn't really relate to the poem at all. It's either that, or maybe you should try using a ...

Being 20 had nothing to do with it, quite honeslty. I've been writing since the age of ten, so I've been able to slowly (very slowly) develop my writing in ...

Catcher in the Rye has always been annoying for me to read. Too much complaining from Holden for me to enjoy it. I honestly don't see how it is considered ...

I wish I had found this thread a while ago...this prologue is awesome. Simply jaw-dropping. I wish I had something to critique, but I really don't think there's anything I ...

This sounded a lot older than what a 13 year old would write...and that's a compliment. Quite impressive, really. I used to be huge into lyrics and all, but all ...

Intense is the best desription of this...awesome job. Wish I had something to critique, but everyone dived on top of it and nailed everything I would've pointed out... Once again, ...

heh; the song started off sounding like it was going to be a song by A Perfect Circle, almost... ...and then it seemed to morph in something Cradle of Filth ...

I could see this as a spoken-word kind of song.... Which is to say, it wasn't bad. It was rather interesting, and I would love to hear the beat or ...

When I lived in England five years ago I thrived on these books. Haven't seen the movie, but occasionally I will still read one or two of the books.

it's nice to see a piece with a sense of humor running through it...I don't see that very often nowadays. It was enjoyable to read; I can't wait to see ...

I have to be honest, I completely forgot to punctuate anything...but comments are appreciated nonetheless. Thank you all.

Clearly this one had some anger behind it, and that's what made it so good. The emotion made me feel the power behind the words. And then of course, the ...