Knurla

Hey Kam! I wanted to tell you that I love this. It really has that Native-American touch. As I was reading, I felt like I was listening to a tribe ...

Ok, so here's what I think. The first letter, to the girl, was so beautiful to me that I almost cried. The pictures you painted for me almost made me ...

Hmm... I've never read anything like this before, therefore I do not know exactly how to judge it. Although, I will tell you that it's quite interesting. Half way through ...

Well... As the others stated, the rhyming felt a little forced. While I was reading this poem, I thought by "tying the knot" you was speaking of marriage, but after ...

Wow....You really did great in capturing the feelings of an anxiety attack in this poem! Just reading it made my chest tighten up, waiting for the next line! Some of ...

Hi there and welcome to YWS! I just wanted you to know that, if I'm correct, you need two reviews before you're allowed to post your own work, so you ...

Hmmm.....well, this was kind of confusing, since you never told us what day it was. And what did he tell the girl? Was it something important? Obviously, it made the ...

I agree with everyone else that this is a very beautiful poem, and that you have done a wonderful job with the imagery! Although, I noticed that the last stanza ...

Here, I feel like you're talking to yourself. I think you should try writing your poetry so that your readers think you are talking to them, so that they get ...

This poem really put alot of disturbing images in my head, but that's what you want to do. You could have you used a slightly better sense of imagery though ...

Every line (except the last five) had me laughing almost until I fell out of my chair! I have the same problem at my school, except they don't say "I'm ...

I agree with both of the above crits, especially Demeter. "who through..." made the poem feel a little awkward. I think you should take her advice in replacing it with ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! Hope you're having fun here! As for your poem, I think it lacks some emotion, and imagery as well. You never told us where the person ...

You know what this poem made me want to do? Slap my boyfriend for every time he's lied to me! I love how you portrayed it as sinful for the ...

Such a lovely poem, dear! With all of the above, I would like to add that, in the first two lines, it seems like you have a "dangling modifier" (I ...