KnightlyAngel09

Hey.:) Okay, first, punctuation and proper capitalization would certainly help here. 'i' for example should be 'I'. Punctuation will greatly improve the flow of this poem. There are thirteen reason ...

haha.:lol: No, I can't review this. I already completely suck at reviewing so I won't even try. This is an utterly subjective comment. haha. I love it. You deserve the ...

hello, hello.:D This poem flowed and rhymed really well. It was very easy to read and the effect of the great rhyming added to the impact of the words. However, ...

Hello. When I reviewed one of your other works your wordplay struck me. It seems to be the definitive characteristic of your writing. It adds something to your works. It ...

Hiya.:D Maniac Magee by Jerry Spinelli. Young adult fiction... I really loved it when I was younger. Really smart too. If you're willing to try some classics, go with To ...

Tears of hope run down my skin. Hope, vane as it may be, never dies, vain, not vane never cries, never bothers to decide that hope has no place here. ...

Hello.:D This is really, really good. You'll be putting this to music or something? Is this a rap? I think that this is a brilliant blend of really deep and ...

Hi. This is really short. Forgive me if I misunderstand this. This is about life isn't it? Fantastic wordplay by the way. It reminds me of the way Shakespeare misplaced ...

Well, the only thing I've read by Paulo Coelho is a bunch of his short prose works in 'Like the Flowing River'. Eh, honestly, based on that I never bought ...

Brilliant.:D haha, that pretty much sums up all I have to say. It's the type of poem that leaves you thinking and amuses and hits you while you read it. ...

Hello. Welcome to YWS. Er... First, did you really mean to post this in the Dramatic poetry section? There are various sections for prose works, you see. Perhaps when you ...

hello. The end is my favorite part. It's always lovely when the end of a poem is brilliant. Hmm... First, I think your rhyme restricts you. In the first stanza, ...

I really love this. It's something one can relate to, especially one who is leaving. I think it was also brilliantly written. It reminded me of an Austen heroine, Fanny ...

This is an excellent poem. I'm wondering about the second to the last stanza though. Are you sure that that should really read 'This seasons' or 'This season's'? Anyway, an ...

Hello.:) This poem strikes me as something like a teen angst poem. First: The beginning of your poem is very weak. The start of the poem needs something in it ...