Kim

short and to the point. you have packed alot with few words. i liked this alot. kim

i really liked this, short and to the point. i am not sure,if this is what you were going for, but it reminded me of death. very emotional and well ...

this is great, i like how you brought in a girl :) you are doing so well with this story bear. i cant wait for your next chapter. hurry K ...

i like this, it shows strength, and the ability to overcome. the only errors i found are a few periods missing at the end of a few lines. other then ...

This is really good. i enjoyed reading it. kim

wow, this is very good. i could not see anything wrong with it. excellent discriptions. you did a great job discribing the kings defeat. i really enjoyed reading this. you ...

this is great, what a neat way to write about a friend. i so like this. your friend is lucky to have someone like you . kim

i just want to thank everyone that has commented. i appreciate all of it. thanks again. kim

i thought this poem was great. i could tell your heart was writing it. honestly who cares about the format if it is written to get your feelings out. that ...

wow, this is absolutely beautifully written. i really liked your discriptions, and emotions. this felt good to read, gives a good feeling. you are very good. kim

you asked for a title for your story. so no critiques from me. for you first time it is pretty good. you have a talent, it just takes time to ...

i dont have to critique, i think they pretty much covered everything. so i got the pleasure of reading it just for the enjoyment. i really liked it. i thought ...

i love music, and you put the emotion in your poem. it is absolutely beautiful. the only thing i would change is breaking it up into paragraphs. it makes it ...

this is very good, i like how you wrote the poem with mostly S's. very different. there is no way i could come up with something using one letter of ...

i like it, it is short but discriptive. and the impulse ones are always the best. great job. kim